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MollyAbe said in March 30th, 2014 at 8:47 pm

2. I liked that you turn something simple, like throwing paper into a wastebasket, into a whole new game. The paragraph about golf seems a bit of place however, I would try to work it into the rest of the piece better, or you could probably do without it all together.

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Colleen Rooney said in March 31st, 2014 at 11:05 pm

3. I thought the piece was funny, and took two things one would normally consider boring and made them into potential Olympic sports. I like the mention of skeet shooting in the beginning, because it provides a nice contrast to the relatively calm and peaceful sports of throwing crumpled paper and peeling oranges. I noticed an issue with this sentence: “Orange not to exceed to the diameter of a baseball.” It seems to me that it would sound better with “orange is” otherwise it just sounds weird to me.

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glord said in April 1st, 2014 at 3:25 pm

2. The first idea was great – the second less convincing for me

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Alex King said in April 9th, 2014 at 7:51 am

Entertaining, but it didn’t really grab me. It’s ok.

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Rose Ippolito said in April 23rd, 2014 at 12:07 pm

2-3. “It’s a science rather than an art” – love that. And I like how it’s sort of Zen yet it has that Western thing going on w/the competition. I also like that it tells us something more about you that makes you even more endearing.

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